Openers

1. Minutes feel like seconds as Cheryl tries to unlock the room.
2. Vanessa tries to scream but no sound seem to be coming out of her mouth.
3. Wilfred’s eyes dart around the room with his heart beat accelerating.
4. A ripple of apprehension goes down Timothy’s spine.
5. Joseph stutters a little as he gave an introduction speech of himself.
6. Eileen’s vision blurs as the examination start.
7. Jocelyn is oblivious to Edmund who has been stalking her for days.
8. Jacqueline takes a deep breath as the opening of the song begins.
9. The day Jayne has been anticipating has finally arrived.
10. Alvin shuts his eyes and bites his lips, he is sure that the end of him is near.
11. Grace shows no hint of awkwardness on her face.
12. Shina rubs her eyes and stifles a yawn…

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  1. Blackmask Said:

    on October 31, 2006 at 7:47 am

    heyz guys took a comment outta GDine’s book and made this! :P hope it ist too crappy tho… hehs sorry if the tense is a bit well confusing… i know i confused myself in trying to force my stubborn mind into writing present tense, 3rd person,active voice…

    the octagons

    Standing on top of the hill in the cool evening air, Vanessa gazes down at the multitude of lights that dot throughout out the city below. Thinking back to the day where she accidentally discovers her gift, where she was just a little girl of 10 and was waiting in the car for her mum to return from the little mart that all petrol stations would have. She had then stared at her mother through the glass display of the shop, and felt the frustration at being left alone inside the car, and told to be “ a good girl” till her mother came back.
    So, she decides to go into her imaginary world of well, day dreams and musings, and then thoughtlessly, oh so thoughtlessly crossed her eyes, well that is to say she made he left eye stare rightwards and her right eye stare leftwards. And the world of light around her suddenly do not appear as lines and circles of light that everyone would see as a lighted florescent tube or bulb, but rather ‘octagons’ of light. It was as if suddenly as if nothing in the world mattered but light.
    Staring at the world of light around her, like the sun staring at its other ever-distant cousins of stars around him she felt that she ought to make up a story about each and every star around her.
    Vanessa decides to start on the ‘star’ that should have been nearest to where her mum was just a few seconds ago, but as she focuses on the star, there is a sudden tug at the ‘top’ of her mind, then came what could be described as her suddenly falling asleep, faster than one can fall into a deep black well. She tries to scream, but no sound seems to come out and she thinks this is how fainting must be like, not even being able to call for help, while all the time falling, falling into a well of eternal blackness.
    Then light. Light in the shop, where she is now in, no longer in the locked car, but now just behind her mother, where she focused her mind on the ‘star’, and in fact, if she just tilted her head back, she would just see the bulb over her head. in fact she wanted to do it again, for what was magic to a girl of 10, but fun and wonder? But Vanessa was a girl who was very obedient and decided that she would at least tell her mother that she had come into the shop and was going back to the car now, but had never gotten the chance as her extremely surprised mother scolded hr for giving her a shock and not listening to instructions, that she was in trouble and “ wait till I get home and tell granny what a naughty little girl you’ve been.”

  2. Here’s the link>>http://gorgeousgdine.wordpress.com/openers/ « NiGHTiNGaLE Said:

    on October 31, 2006 at 7:57 am

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  3. misterryan Said:

    on November 4, 2006 at 7:23 pm

    I actually feel like your first sentence is the most interesting. I’m glad it’s the one we talked about in class.

  4. misterryan Said:

    on November 4, 2006 at 7:25 pm

    I don’t know what’s up with Gwyn though. I don’t even see your opener in his story. The only thing in common is you both seem to have the name Vanessa in it.

  5. Blackmask Said:

    on December 12, 2006 at 2:14 pm

    heyz guys took a comment outta GDine’s book and made this! hope it ist too crappy tho… hehs sorry if the tense is a bit well confusing… i know i confused myself in trying to force my stubborn mind into writing present tense, 3rd person,active voice…

    the octagons
    A ripple of apprehension goes down her spine, as she
    stands on top of the hill in the cool evening air.Vanessa gazes down at the multitude of lights that dot throughout out the city below. Thinking back to the day where she accidentally discovers her gift, where she was just a little girl of 10 and was waiting in the car for her mum to return from the little mart that all petrol stations would have. She had then stared at her mother through the glass display of the shop, and felt the frustration at being left alone inside the car, and told to be “ a good girl” till her mother came back.
    So, she decides to go into her imaginary world of well, day dreams and musings, and then thoughtlessly, oh so thoughtlessly crossed her eyes, well that is to say she made he left eye stare rightwards and her right eye stare leftwards. And the world of light around her suddenly do not appear as lines and circles of light that everyone would see as a lighted florescent tube or bulb, but rather ‘octagons’ of light. It was as if suddenly as if nothing in the world mattered but light.
    Staring at the world of light around her, like the sun staring at its other ever-distant cousins of stars around him she felt that she ought to make up a story about each and every star around her.
    Vanessa decides to start on the ‘star’ that should have been nearest to where her mum was just a few seconds ago, but as she focuses on the star, there is a sudden tug at the ‘top’ of her mind, then came what could be described as her suddenly falling asleep, faster than one can fall into a deep black well. She tries to scream, but no sound seems to come out and she thinks this is how fainting must be like, not even being able to call for help, while all the time falling, falling into a well of eternal blackness.
    Then light. Light in the shop, where she is now in, no longer in the locked car, but now just behind her mother, where she focused her mind on the ‘star’, and in fact, if she just tilted her head back, she would just see the bulb over her head. in fact she wanted to do it again, for what was magic to a girl of 10, but fun and wonder? But Vanessa was a girl who was very obedient and decided that she would at least tell her mother that she had come into the shop and was going back to the car now, but had never gotten the chance as her extremely surprised mother scolded hr for giving her a shock and not listening to instructions, that she was in trouble and “ wait till I get home and tell granny what a naughty little girl you’ve been.”


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